To All things Their Season - Chapter 1 #edit and #revision

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OVERALL: Great job the worldbuilding. The magic systems appearing were cool, and as a huge fan of Steven King’s Gunslinger series, I’m excited that there are firearms in this magical world, and I’m curious to see the family issues and drama unfold. In terms of areas to improve, I’d take a grammar pass when able, but mostly think about how you’re communicating exposition and character information, and in revisions, keep finding ways to streamline that info share!



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